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August 15, 2016
Dare by Tobaeus is wonderfully written, with a surprising and amusing twist at the end.
Featured by brennennn
Suggested by C-A-Harland
Literature Text
Coral gazed into the surface at her own reflection. It looked scared. What a stupid thing to be, she thought. There’s nothing dangerous about this game.
She scrunched her eyes shut anyway and thrust her hand into the surface. The cries of admiration from her friends made it worth it.
“What does it feel like?”
“Cold,” she said. “And heavy.” There wasn’t the same kind reassuring pressure she was used to. She pulled her hand back out slowly and felt the warmth return to her skin. The others would make fun if they knew how scary it had been, so she tried not to let her relief show.
“Do it again!”
“No, you do it. I did it already.”
“If you do it, I’ll do any dare you tell me to.”
“Oh, really? Will you swim out to the shipwreck and bring something back from it?”
Kai balked at this. “What? That’s way more dangerous than this.”
“Yes. But you want me to do this twice. No shipwreck, no deal.”
He probably would have said no, but there were too many others gathered for him to back down. His reputation was at stake. She watched his face close off. “Fine,” he said. “Deal.”
Coral suppressed a victory smile and thrust her hand through the surface of the water again, this time all the way up to the shoulder. Her friends started shouting, and she thought it was because they were so impressed with her, so she grinned at them.
But then something wrapped itself around Coral’s hand and dragged her to the surface.
She broke through into the cold air on the other side of the water, into the harsh light. All her friends swam away in a panic. She tried to call out to them, but the freezing air burned her gills. All she could do was struggle as more hands grasped at her and pulled her into something that looked like a much smaller version of the shipwrecks she had seen in her everyday explorations.
“Look what we have here, gentlemen,” said a gruff voice. “Looks like today wasn’t so unlucky after all. Take us back to the ship, Mister Torban. I believe the captain will be pleased to lay his eyes on his very first mermaid.”
She scrunched her eyes shut anyway and thrust her hand into the surface. The cries of admiration from her friends made it worth it.
“What does it feel like?”
“Cold,” she said. “And heavy.” There wasn’t the same kind reassuring pressure she was used to. She pulled her hand back out slowly and felt the warmth return to her skin. The others would make fun if they knew how scary it had been, so she tried not to let her relief show.
“Do it again!”
“No, you do it. I did it already.”
“If you do it, I’ll do any dare you tell me to.”
“Oh, really? Will you swim out to the shipwreck and bring something back from it?”
Kai balked at this. “What? That’s way more dangerous than this.”
“Yes. But you want me to do this twice. No shipwreck, no deal.”
He probably would have said no, but there were too many others gathered for him to back down. His reputation was at stake. She watched his face close off. “Fine,” he said. “Deal.”
Coral suppressed a victory smile and thrust her hand through the surface of the water again, this time all the way up to the shoulder. Her friends started shouting, and she thought it was because they were so impressed with her, so she grinned at them.
But then something wrapped itself around Coral’s hand and dragged her to the surface.
She broke through into the cold air on the other side of the water, into the harsh light. All her friends swam away in a panic. She tried to call out to them, but the freezing air burned her gills. All she could do was struggle as more hands grasped at her and pulled her into something that looked like a much smaller version of the shipwrecks she had seen in her everyday explorations.
“Look what we have here, gentlemen,” said a gruff voice. “Looks like today wasn’t so unlucky after all. Take us back to the ship, Mister Torban. I believe the captain will be pleased to lay his eyes on his very first mermaid.”
Literature
The World's End
Where ravens feast on mortal sin,
The world ends at a clifftop inn
Whose greeting is a fleshless grin
From pirates' gibbet at the door.
This lonely structure is adorned
With bodies of those men unmourned,
With sign proclaiming Ye be warned,
And always room enough for more.
Our story, though, tells not of this,
This feared, this known, this bland abyss,
But rather of the promised bliss
A spyglass offers to these men.
For if, once fear has gripped his mind,
Our pirate's hand, then eye should find
The spyglass hidden just behind
The rotting gibbet post, well then...
Well, then he runs, or jumps, or flies,
(That is to say, the fellow tries,)
En
Literature
Shrouds for a ship.
The ship, and nearly all her crew and passengers with her, were lost on the 22nd of May. On the 24th, Dorothy started making model boats.
Her fingers hurt a little, of course. Red, cold, and sometimes even damp, they caught on the makeshift sails and left unsightly blotches on the hulls. The hulls were one of the hardest bits. Hours were consumed by the whittling and painting and drying. The rigging was even worse; the threading she used was almost impossible to keep a tight grip upon, and the variations of beige and brown and black meant they often vanished entirely if dropped to the dirt floor. As for the masts, these took an enormous amo
Literature
Flagstones (Section 170 (7))
I went back to the secret
waterfall where once
we professed our love
and poured libations to the gods,
only the river had dried
to a trickle
and was choked
with leaves.
I stood there
alone
on the wide dry stones,
listening to the humbled
murmur of lost waters,
and realized
that when the river was gone
it became a road.
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Word count: 387
Dares are dumb guys, don't do them. Unless they're art or writing related. Then maybe.
Edit: Holy crow, a DD? Many thanks to C-A-Harland for suggesting this story and brennenxr for featuring me! Have a great day, everyone!
Word count: 387
Dares are dumb guys, don't do them. Unless they're art or writing related. Then maybe.
Edit: Holy crow, a DD? Many thanks to C-A-Harland for suggesting this story and brennenxr for featuring me! Have a great day, everyone!
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oh noooo!
(also I saw it coming from the fourth paragraph but that's both because I tend to be looking for the twists, and a marker of how damn well you foreshadowed it A++ on that)
oh noooo!
(also I saw it coming from the fourth paragraph but that's both because I tend to be looking for the twists, and a marker of how damn well you foreshadowed it A++ on that)